Paper A: The Effects of Daycare on Children

Argument: What are the consequences of mothers working outside the home on their child’s development?

Mothers working outside the home hinders the development process of the child

Because when the mother is away from the home and enrolls the child in daycare, it leaves the teaching of basic developmental skills to someone who doesn’t know them on a deep level.

The target audience: mothers with one child who is between the ages of 1 and 3. They utilize daycare services because they are working even though their family income is adequate using the father’s income alone.

The goal of this paper is to persuade the audience that going back to work and leaving their child in daycare services does not have the best effects on their child’s growth and development.

One problem with this paper involved the logic used to appeal to logos. While the argument makes sense, there was not enough attention to counterarguments to help the audience see the differences between viewpoints. While counterarguments were mentioned, they were not developed at all so the logic of making a clear argument against those points proved to not be effective because the entire paper is just pointing out one side of the argument. This paper also does not follow the logic of a persuasive paper because it implies a lot of points that are really not proven to be true. There needs to be more evidence for the claims made. Sufficiency was a problem in this paper as well. There were two different arguments that started to be developed. One reason why this was the case was because the argument was not specific enough and opened up too many options. While both arguments were valid, there was not enough evidence to truly support either one. The few sources that were used were helpful but were not used in the most effective manner.

This paper was not as effective as it could have been. The biggest problem was the fact that there were two different arguments trying to be proven throughout the paper. It was hard to follow both arguments and get a solid conclusion at the end as to why the audience should agree with the point that mothers should stay home and care for their children instead of going to work and leaving them at daycare.

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